As Jimmy walked up to the horses to say his final good-byes, the only thing he felt was guilt. He shouldn’t be leaving them, but fate had her own way. And Athena, he did not have the courage to face her…
For seven years now, Jimmy had worked on the ranch. He tended to the horses and the sheep, and even though it didn’t pay much he did it lovingly. It had been the first summer after he joined that he found a white colored pony wandering outside the ranch. No one knew to whom it belonged. So Mr. Poe decided to take her in. ”Tis not everyday you see a white horse in these parts, boy!!’ he said cheerfully. Jimmy quickly took a liking to the pony. He liked that she looked so regal with eyes that spoke of brilliance. He promptly named her Athena, much to Mr.Poe’s dismay.
For seven years, he had seen her grow into an adorable horse. She was always sport for a ride and was a great listener too.
As he stroked Athena’s forehead now, Mr. Poe suddenly appeared behind and looked at him tenderly. “Tell you what, boy! Take her with you. I think she’ll like it.’
Slightly longer this time at 205 words but I couldn’t chop off anything. Also, I don’t know much about the cowboy culture and animal ranches so please pardon if I have made any conceptual mistakes here.
Written for the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge. Click on the below image to read more.
Wonderful story Uday! I’m so glad that Mr. Poe gave Jimmy the white horse because I think he was particularly fond of her. Great story and thank you for participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge!
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Thank you PJ! Yes he was really fond of her, so I’m glad how it turned out too 😀 And my apologies for the late reply. I’m currently on holiday with limited internet access! 😦 So trying as best as I can to keep up with my blog.
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No problem at all! Enjoy your holiday!!
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I don’t think you have made any mistakes here…based on the movies i have seen, this is it! Perfect!
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Thank you Alok! And I’m glad there were no glitches 🙂
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Perfect for the word limit. I wonder if he changes his mind about leaving…goodbyes are hard especially with animals.
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Yea they really are. But I don’t think he has a choice. I haven’t figured out why, but he really has to leave the ranch. Which is sad!
Thank you for your comment.
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Yes, it appears he hasn’t. And yet, a quirky turn of events could probably bring him back.
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Yep, that’s quite possible I suppose! 🙂
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I’m glad he got to take Athena with him. Good story and nice ending!
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I was glad too 🙂 Thanks for your comment!
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A great heart warming story Uday and Athena and Jimmy would be happy in each other’s company.
Thanks Poe for it.
http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2015/09/rode-away.html?m=1
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Yep, I want to believe Athena had a great time with Jimmy till the end! Glad you liked it. 🙂
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Your story is amazing. Liked!
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That is beautiful. An understanding boss, a good and devoted worker and a connection between horse and man. Well done.
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Thank you for your wonderful comment! Much appreciated. 🙂
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I agree with the above comments, lovely story.
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Thanks Sally! Glad you liked it 🙂
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Woot woot! He gets to take her with him; their bond won’t be severed by such a separation. I’m happy for them both. 😀
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I was happy for them too 😀 Thanks for stopping by!
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That was perfect ending! Pleasure read… 🙂 It’s always good to get the loved ones.. 🙂
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Indeed! Happy you liked it, Prakash! 🙂
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