Jake Sanders dragged his feet across the desert. The sand under his bare feet was scorching hot, and made every step a walk towards hell. The Sun, directly above his head, was at its merciless best, and showed no signs of taking a break behind the gossamer clouds. He’d been walking for three days now and trying to put as much distance as possible between him and the terrorists. Being held hostage sounded cool until they’d started killing people.
Now he had no food and water (both bottle and bladder) left, the little he could smuggle out only lasted two days. His throat was parched beyond repair, the bruise on his shoulder was getting worse and at that point, he concluded that that his time was over. There were no human settlements for miles, and he would never make it there like this. He crashed onto the sand next to a cactus shrub, ready to let death devour him.
Then he spotted it. The white butterfly wavering above his head. It looked battered and part of its right wing was missing, and yet was relentlessly trying to land on the wild flower. He had all of his limbs functional and had no excuse for giving up! He slowly managed to get back on his feet again, and as if on cue, a thunder echoed across the sky.
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I loved this Uday. You set up the scene magnificently. It was wonderful how the butterfly gave him the fortitude to get up and continue and as soon as he made up his mind to continue, a thunder sounded meaning rain was on its way. Great story! I loved it!
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Thank you, PJ! I’m happy with the way this story turned out and I did pay special attention to description this time. FFfAW is really improving my writing! 🙂
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That’s great! I’m glad the FFfAW is helping you improve your writing! Your story was really really good!
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🙂 Many thanks, that makes me happy.
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Wonderful story! 🙂
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Many Thanks Kat 🙂
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Wow, this is deep. Just take one more step. Just take one more second to exercise your faith that you will make it. Just try like the butterfly. He isn’t alone in the struggle. Oh, how I love what’s being explicitly and implicitly said in this piece. Excellent job!
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Thank you for your wonderful comment, izzy 🙂 It makes me happy to see that what I intended got through.
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Your words are so descriptive, I could see it all in my mind as I read each word…I could feel the heat from the sun, imagine Jake’s parched lips, see him just fall over to the sand and give up….but wait no not give up, get inspired to carry on. He musters up the strength to begin again!! Marvelous story!!!
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It makes me so happy so see how you enjoyed my writing. Thank you heaps, Deb! 😀
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Looking forward to enjoying more! 😊
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A beautiful story about perseverance, Uday. 🙂 Nicely done.
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Many thanks Louise! 🙂
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